Groggles and Ninns

Subject: Groggles and Ninns Fri Sep 25, 2009 7:51 am

In chapter 3, you meet Princess Keeah. Write a short story about Princess Keeah and her family.
Use and undeline 10 words from your vocabulary list from chapter 3.

Name	Written	Do Again	Do Again	FINISH
Luke	ㅁ	X	X	Okay
Hyeon-Jin	ㅁ	ㅁ	X	X
Andy	X	X	X	X
Sang-Jun	X	X	X	X
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Name	X	X	X	X
Name	X	X	X	X
Name	X	X	X	X
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Posts : 22 Join date : 2009-09-28

Keeah was heading to the door when he saw a King and a Queen. Later they became a family.King Zello likes to remodel the house and find tresure chests.He likes to peek in the basement.He also likes to hide in a hideout.Queen Relna love to recycle junks.She likes to clean dusty places.Princess Keeah find stuff, solve mystery.She always muffle his mom before goes to bed everyday.[u]

Posts : 23 Join date : 2009-09-28

king zello had a basment and queen relna had a chest inside there was lot's of junk that junk wasen't any junk. If you make a stuff with it, it was moving so they made lot's of groggles and ninn's. They went very quickly so no one could follow one day she was playing she sprained she saw a narrow path she grow fast. she tumbled her body tingled.

Subject: Feedback for Luke Thu Oct 22, 2009 10:12 am

Luke1502 wrote:: Keeah was heading to the door when he saw a King and a Queen. Later they became a family.King Zello likes to remodel the house and find tresure chests.He likes to peek in the basement.He also likes to hide in a hideout.Queen Relna love to recycle junks.She likes to clean dusty places.Princess Keeah find stuff, solve mystery.She always muffle his mom before goes to bed everyday.

This is a good effort Luke.

You write a lot of things about the family and that is good. I would have liked to have learned more about how they became a family. It is interesting to know that King Zello and Queen Relna are not Princess Keeah's real parents.

I do not understand your last sentence:

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Remember, to always try and explain everything.

Subject: Feedback for Hyeon-Jin Thu Oct 22, 2009 10:17 am

Hyeon-Jin wrote:: king zello had a basment and queen relna had a chest inside there was lot's of junk that junk wasen't any junk. If you make a stuff with it, it was moving so they made lot's of groggles and ninn's. They went very quickly so no one could follow one day she was playing she sprained she saw a narrow path she grow fast. she tumbled her body tingled.

Hi Hyeon-Jin.

I see here that you are trying very hard to write a story about King Zello, Queen Relna and Princess Keeah. I have some difficulty understanding your story. Who is making the groggles and ninns? Maybe you can write a story about the king, queen and princess fighting against the groggles and ninns.

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Posts : 23 Join date : 2009-09-28

king zello had a chest. inside the chest there was a paper scribbled. queen relna had a basement with junk. queen relna use the paper and made something's. keeah like to sprinkle it on the narrow path. she like solved problems and make magic dust.that made to vannish and pain. and they had a bird. it fluttered and folowed where ever keeah went.

Posts : 15 Join date : 2009-11-29

At 3o'clock Keeah went to a king's garden. She is sprinkled the flowers.
suddenly she is fell down and she sprain her leg. gaden is broken and he groaned. She run away to Narrow path.
because that garden is king's garden. suddenly her view is fade and she is slept there.
1 hour later strange bird is flutter to me and she woke up. she is dash to another tree.
She take leaps and fix the her leg. bird is came and it suddenly vanished. it changed
big bird and it take to the keeah's hose. king is not angry and he cried to me and said " Are you Ok? "
and i said " yes"
i said " sorry for broke garden"
king replied " That's ok "
i naver go to king's garden...

Posts : 17 Join date : 2009-12-03

keeah's father is severe. her mather too. and she hate keeah.
finally, keeah resolved. " I go out outside!!!" if she vanish in castle,her parent will cry and say " keeahhhhh~~~~ where are you??"
keeah imagined her parent crying face and she laughed. keeah was happy.so
she leaped narrow steps. she tumble on staps and keeah spraine her ankle. she clasp her ankle and groan.
"ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"
maids were dashto keeah. "princess! why do you jump on steps?
keeah said "I wanted to vanish" "so, you try to die?" "no!!!!!!!" castle's flag fluttered. sky was clear.
keesh's legend is maybe countiue. forever