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Admin
Admin
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Age : 49
Location : Changwon, Korea / Ottawa, Canada
 |  Subject: Post-Test page 16  Mon Feb 15, 2010 2:31 pm | |
| Rewrite the sentence below. Make the underlined nouns more exact. Use your new sentence as the main idea of a paragraph. Write your paragraph below your sentence.
When I grow up, I will be a person and work in a place.| Name | 1st writing | 2nd writing | Grade | | Luke | do again | XXX | XXX | | Hyeon-Jin | do again | do again | XXX | | Name | XXX | XXX | XXX | | Name | XXX | XXX | XXX | | Name | XXX | XXX | XXX | | Name | | | | | Name | | | | | Name | | | | | Name | | | | | Name | | | | | Name | | | |
FBC = feedback coming
TBG = to be graded
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Hyeon-Jin
Posts : 23
Join date : 2009-09-28
| | Subject: when I grow up........................... Tue Feb 16, 2010 4:02 pm | |
| When I grow up, I will be a police officer and work in a police station.
Last edited by Hyeon-Jin on Tue Mar 02, 2010 2:00 pm; edited 2 times in total | |
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Luke1502
Posts : 22
Join date : 2009-09-28
| | Subject: Feedback for Luke Wed Feb 17, 2010 1:09 pm | |
| When I grow up, I will be a police officer and work in a police station.
Really Luke? You will do the same thing as Hyeon-Jin? Will the two of you work together?
Where is your paragraph?
Change the word = I saw three hours of cartoons on TV.
Fix the mistake = I last the ball. // I am do my homework. // i forgot my book.
Erase a word = I lost the the ball.
Add a word = [___] | |
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Admin
Admin
Posts : 358
Join date : 2009-09-23
Age : 49
Location : Changwon, Korea / Ottawa, Canada
| | Subject: Feedback for Hyeon-Jin Thu Feb 25, 2010 12:12 pm | |
| - Hyeon-Jin wrote:
- When I grow up, I will be a policeofficer and work in a policestation.
Where is your paragraph?
Change the word = I saw three hours of cartoons on TV.
Fix the mistake = I last the ball. // I am do my homework. // i forgot my book.
Erase a word = I lost the the ball.
Add a word = [___] | |
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Hyeon-Jin
Posts : 23
Join date : 2009-09-28
| | Subject: I like grade4 Wed Mar 03, 2010 12:54 pm | |
| Today I went to school. At new class I saw new friends. My teacher was also changed!!! I like the new class and friends. There was also bad friends.In my class there was last year friends. The teacher was a girl. The teacher was young and kind. I like grade 4. | |
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Admin
Admin
Posts : 358
Join date : 2009-09-23
Age : 49
Location : Changwon, Korea / Ottawa, Canada
| | Subject: Second Feedback for Hyeon-Jin Mon Mar 08, 2010 2:21 pm | |
| - Hyeon-Jin wrote:
- Today I went to school. At new class I saw new friends. My teacher was also changed!!! I like the new class and friends. There was also bad friends.In my class there was last year friends. The teacher was a girl. The teacher was young and kind. I like grade 4.
It is nice to see that you wrote a paragraph, but it is wrong. You need to write a paragraph with the topic sentence that you created.
Change the word = I saw three hours of cartoons on TV.
Fix the mistake = I last the ball. // I am do my homework. // i forgot my book.
Erase a word = I lost the the ball.
Add a word = [___]
Write your new writing in another post. | |
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Hyeon-Jin
Posts : 23
Join date : 2009-09-28
| | Subject: I will be a police officer Wed Mar 10, 2010 8:59 am | |
| I will be a police officer because police can catch the bad peoples and they founds the lost kids so I want to be a police officer | |
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Luke1502
Posts : 22
Join date : 2009-09-28
| | Subject: Re: Post-Test page 16 Wed Mar 10, 2010 5:12 pm | |
| I want to be a astronaut, because I want to explore the space. My dream is blasting to space riding on a real space rocket. | |
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